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Tuesday, June 27, 2017

refugees

  Refugeees 

Boom! Crashed! Blood splatters over my window. My mum rushed to the door. It was on Saturday night. I was so scared and frightened,like a tornado blowing up right next to us!

My name is Roszy. I have blazing,glooming blue eyes. I am the oldest child of four sisters. Zoe,Bella,Lotty and saskia. Zoe is 10,Bella is 12,Lotty is 13,Saskia is 8 and I am 14. When the bomb hit my sisters and I with my mum were not refugees. My mums name was Elizabeth.

We walked to a bunch of tents. We had no water or food. When the tornado arubted saskia was bursting in tears.             The End

5 comments:

  1. Good job Emma you did well just remember that you need to put in a simile but good 😊 job

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  2. Nice comment Katie, very helpful. Emma a simile is when you say something is like something else, for example 'Emma is like a Nadia Comaneci when she does gymnastics'.

    Search up Nadia Comaneci if you don't know who she is.

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  3. Hello Emma,

    Awesome story. I like how you wrote 'blazing, glooming blue eyes.' it's so descriptive. Why did you write this story?

    Great work.

    Prudence,
    Yaldhurst Model School

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    1. Thank you soo much😊 Well we were writing about refugees...

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  4. I really like ur story it's was really descriptive. But tornados🌪 don't explode but that's ok

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